Eh. Sounds a bit cliche; no offense. I personally would lean towards some kind of dark humor for the beginning. Something to snag the reader and drag them down with you into the more serious parts of the story.

Did with a story about a guy who grew up wanting to be a serial killer. Crack a couple jokes here and there and then BAM! He kills someone with a crowbar and starts getting a little introspective about his desire to be come a serial killer.

I think the best part is that you don’t have to worry about real places and events, because they are a little insane so they don’t really care.

Oh, and I thought of a pretty cool opening line:

“Wake up, Mister Lam. You’re dead.”

… or not? xD

You seem to know a lot about writing! Do you do any yourself?

“Write anything and say it’s not MEANT to make sense. Heh.”

Now that is cheating ;D

Yup, it’s pretty much the perfect setting imo, you can go all the way into the present for messed up treatment of mental illness/disability, but I personally find it more interesting when taken to EXTREMES. Just don’t get all cliche and bring up Bedlam. The relative lack of real understanding of mental illness allows for some more interesting situations as well.

That’s the beauty of the creative process. ;D

I like the Victorian setting. I didn’t want to go too modern, where there are countless cures and everyone’s looked after, surrounded by a bazillion scientific names for obvious reasons. But I think yeah, demons and such would be fun to play with.

The story keeps changing! But I still want a dying mental patient to lead the role.

Crap o,o I think I’m gonna have to try my hand at that O.o;;

Oh I entirely agree. That’s why I said they’re so much fun. Having a multitude of personalities could still make things interesting though. Introducing a newly discovered personality at some point could bring up the suspense and complexity of the story when needed,and make Ralph and even Sino (which could be interesting considering how influential/authoritative his character seems to be compared to Ralph whom I picture as all bedraggled and bewildered).

It could even just be two different people. I liked the idea of a mental disorder, and in particular two personalities, because I can be both serious and insane with only two eyes. But anyway, thanks for the input!

(I actually only just added that in yesterday!)